This week we had to do some writing for our task, I chose to do horror. Here are some of my work while doing the story.
Narrative Writing - Blockbuster Movie
Topic - Horror
Scary -
Terrifying - Making someone or something extremely scared.
Horrific - Causing horror
Frightful - Getting shocked or feeling unpleasant.
Panic -
Dark -
Characters -
Julie
Zack
Rae
Setting -
Forest & camp grounds
- Here is my story board
Here are the characters I drew for the story -
Story -
One eery night 3 friends Julie, Rae & Zack decided to go camping in a forest in the middle of nowhere. After hours and hours of driving to their location they decided to take a break at the side of the road merely away from the forest, as they were falling asleep Julie heard a whisper coming from outside of the car, She thought to herself that it was probably just her from all the hours of driving she must’ve just been hearing things, right?Morning struck and they were on the road again. As they were jamming to some music from the radio Julie remembered the whisper she heard last night, she quickly got it out of her head thinking she was just hallucinating last night. After an hour of driving they finally arrived to the forest. They decided to set up the camp, After hours and hours of setting up camp they were drained. As soon as the tents were set up they slept immediately until morning came. They woke up to the sun beaming into their eyes blinding them, Julie put her hat on and went outside to go and wake up her friends. After they were all awake they had some breakfast, But Julie heard the whisper again, this time coming from deep inside the woods, She quickly looked behind her, No one was there. Rae called her name repeatedly but Julie seemed to not hear her shouting her name, Rae tapped Julie's shoulder and it gave Julie quite a fright. As the hours passed night came and it was time to go to bed, As they were about to sleep Zack came to Julie and Rae’s tent. He woke them up and asked if they wanted to go with him and look around the forest, They both said yes. As they walked inside the forest Julie felt a chilling feeling, She looked at Zack and Rae and they also seemed to get the same feeling. They walked deeper and deeper…. Suddenly they heard a rustling in the forest, 3 of them came closer together and they felt as if someone was watching their every move. As they looked around Julie saw something from the corner of her eye, It was terrifying, It had a black foggy body and It had red beady eyes that looked as if you looked at it, it would stare straight into your soul. We desperately ran barely breathing, We screamed at the top of our lungs but it was no use, we were in the middle of nowhere not knowing where to go. As I looked to the left 1 of my friends had disappeared, I had no choice but to keep running. Julie stopped and hid behind a nearby rock and gasped for air. Julie looked to the right and saw Zack running past her, Julie couldn't help him because the creature was right behind him… The creature grabbed Zack and he suddenly disappeared, Julie covered her mouth to keep her from making any noise. While the creature was busy Julie took her chance and ran for her life, She saw smoke coming from the distance, It must be our campfire! Julie ran and ran, she finally made it back, she felt relieved when she got out of the forest but didn't stop, instead grabbed her phone to call emergency services, As she waited for them to pick up she locked herself in the car. They finally picked up, she reported what happened, good thing the police station was only an hour away. She looked back to the forest and saw the creature looking straight at her, But the creature seemed to not be able to pass the forest. She sighed in relief and took a rest in her car. She woke up to sirens coming, She ran out of her car, It seemed like nobody noticed her, She shouted and shouted but no one heard her. She walked in front of someone but the person walked right into her, She started to panic and looked at her reflection in the side mirror of a car, But she couldn't see her reflection, It was then that she realised she was dead.
I hope you enjoyed my story! Feel free to leave feedback for me. :)Thanks for reading!
Kia ora Faye!
ReplyDeleteThank you very much for confidently sharing your writing during our google meet today. It was really interesting to listen to your character descriptions and look at the planning you did before you began writing. Your story was really engaging and made me want to keep reading. The words you used really painted a picture and certainly made your horror story very gripping. Perhaps next week when you do your writing task, you could try and use some different sentence starters. What genre of writing do you think you will choose next week?
Keep up the awesome work.
Miss Tozer.
Hi Miss Tozer, Thank you for the feedback on my work.
DeleteI am thinking of choosing fantasy for my next genre.
Wow Faye, Great idea for your horror story. You do well to keep the story moving along. There were several classic horror moments where the characters decide to do things that really not a good idea- a walk in the woods in the middle of the night, for example. I like the surprise at the end and how you reveal Julie's fate. A suggestion for next time might be to separate your text into paragraphs. I look forward to reading your next piece of writing. :)
ReplyDeleteHi Mr Collins, Thank you for the feedback, I will definitely take your advice and put it in paragraphs next time I make a story. Thanks. :)
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